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Your heart is beating in your throat. You gulp as you step up next to his shins, fright and inquisitiveness swirling throughout you.

One arm against your chest, you lean over slightly to get a better look at him. As you lean in, you begin to be able to see your breath escape your semi-open mouth in little wisps. You close it as if the wisps will make him regain consciousness. You want to see every detail of this stranger who surprised you.

He’s flat on his back, right hand by his head and the left one lying on his stomach. One leg is slightly more bent than the other. He looks like he could just be sleeping.

His clothes are odd…there’s no way he’s from this decade…from this century. His long, thin legs are clothed by brown pants that are faded to a light tan on the front and back of his thighs, strapped snugly to his calves by what appear to be mildly lighter brown leather straps. They cut off mid-shin, the edges tattered, torn, and covered in what appears to be thin spindles of ice that reach up to just below his knees. He has three layers of clothes on his torso. The first is a white long-sleeved shirt with a v-neck and loose-fitting sleeves that end in white buttons on the cuffs. On top of that, he’s wearing a tailored-to-fit brown vest made of a thick cloth that he has left unbuttoned. Around his shoulders, tied by a string at his neck, he wears a two-layered cape made of the same brown material as the vest. The edges are skillfully embroidered in beautiful small white swirls of ice that glisten in the light. You notice that the vest has a similar pattern on its bottom corners and edge.

He groans, and you leap back. After ten or fifteen seconds of no further signs of life, you decide that it’s okay to approach him once again. He’s really out cold. You decide that you had better take him inside and out of the mercy of the elements. Your feet are starting to get cold, too.

You sigh. Why am I such a nice person? Your examination of him will have to continue once inside.

A little mad at yourself for not having common sense and just calling the paramedics—or the police—and for being too curious, you crouch with your back to his torso. You manage to sling his limp arms around your shoulders. You gather up his legs, one in each arm, pick up the staff, and piggyback him into the house. He’s surprisingly light. Light as snow…

You set the staff in the corner and gently lay him down on the couch. He’s a bit too tall for the small thing, so you’re forced to grab a pillow and prop him up a bit. You practically hug him and sit him up ever so slightly placing the pillow behind him for comfort. You get a sudden, subtle whiff of pine tree. He smells like…like Winter.

Flustered, you quickly let go, his head lolling from one side to the other. Calm down, (your name), you command yourself. You pace a little and settle your racing heart, feeling the blush leave your face. You go back to the couch and extend your hand, turning your head away and closing your eyes out of fear the something might happen.

Your hand meets his forehead. He’s ice cold.

You open your eyes. Oh man, he’s dead, is your first thought. I have a dead person in my house. Shoulda called the paramedics. Your hand finds his neck, which is equally cold. It’s strong, though…young…You take another breath to prevent another blush from spreading across your face. You rest two fingers on his neck, feeling for a pulse.

One heartbeat, then another. Rhythmic. He’s alive all right.

You remove your hand and turn your head, one eyebrow raised in confusion.

Frostbite? You wonder. You notice that he’s barefoot. His feet are long and slender to match his height. And pale, tinged slightly blue around the nails. Frostbite.

You immediately cover him with your favorite blanket, the same one you found on you the previous night. His face  scrunches up momentarily as if having a bad dream, but makes no motions after that. You rush over to the fireplace and light up a new log, which soon takes, very excited to have two people to talk to.

You empty a can of soup into a pot and stick it on the stove to warm.

Out of things to do, you sit in the middle of the room, facing your odd guest and patient.
Now, you really get to get a good look at what he looks like.

Your eyebrows shoot up out of shock, your heart in a new flurry. He’s extremely attractive. His pale white skin is smooth and flawless. The tip of his nose, cheeks, and tops of his ears are tinged a very, very slight pink, like someone who’s been out in the cold. The edges of his ears are dusted with an almost unnoticeable black-blue. You attribute the bluish tint of the tips and edges of his fingers to the frostbite. His thin lips are a light pink, almost white, with the same small tint of blue. His eyebrows are brown and his face is a slight oval shape, ending in a perfect chin and jaw for a boy. He’s young, around 17 or 18, you’d say. But those clothes…

Something else really catches your attention. His hair. It’s a completely different color from his eyebrows. It’s white as new-fallen snow, a shiny white-silver towards the roots. The fire’s flames make it glint and glisten oh so slightly. Not an oily shine. No…one like fresh snow in the sunlight.

You’ve never seen anyone have attributes quite like any of these.

Is he even human…? He looks human enough…

A bubbling coming from the kitchen takes you out of the trance and you slowly stand up, eyes still fixed on him. You pause a moment before going to save the soup from overboiling.

Who ARE you?
Chapter 5 is finally here! It's kind of a long one, guys...I got carried away at describing him. x3
I spend ages deciding if I should have him in his original clothes or the hoodie...
Chapter 1: [link]
2: [link]
3: [link]
4: [link]
6: [link]
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Unserwatergurl Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2014
DONT READ THIS. YOU WILL BE KISSED ON THE BEST DAY OF YOUR LIFE. NOW THAT YOU'VE STARTED READING, DONT STOP. THIS IS SO FREAKY. 1 say your name 10 times 2. say your mum's name 5 times and your crushes name 3 times 4. paste this onto 4 other games. If you do this, your crush will kiss you on the nearest Friday possible. But if you read this and do not paste this, you will get bad luck. SEND THIS ON 5 DIFFERENT GAMES IN 143 MINUTES. WHEN YOUR DONE, PRESS F6 AND YOUR CRUSHES NAME WILL APPEAR IN BIG LETTERS. THIS IS SO FREAKY IT ACTUALLY WORKS
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jeffyarts Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2014
so interesting... 
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AironFay Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
o.O poor Jack

either someone said he doesn't exist or someone knocked over his snow castle.  X D
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:iconlegendoffullmetal:
LegendofFullmetal Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
or...both. x3
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ETB-Emily-The-Bride Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
X3 yeah!!!
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:iconcartoonlovinggal:
cartoonlovinggal Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Did... We just knock Jack Frost out o.O' what a great first impression. Lol, love it!
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:iconlegendoffullmetal:
LegendofFullmetal Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconwoohooplz:
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:iconcartoonlovinggal:
cartoonlovinggal Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
XD
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:icon2pfemitaly:
2pfemitaly Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
(I liked the fact you put him in his original clothes. I think they suit him very well!) *sings* white lips, pale face. breathing in,the snowflakes. lol sorry, every time someone describes his looks, or I sit there and study him when im watching the movie, that song comes to mind :P
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:iconlegendoffullmetal:
LegendofFullmetal Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
what song is that?
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:icon2pfemitaly:
2pfemitaly Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
lol its called 'The A-Team', I think its by Ed Sheeran? idk, that's the title tho!
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:iconlegendoffullmetal:
LegendofFullmetal Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
aaaah x3
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:iconawesomegirl37:
awesomegirl37 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist
lol why am i so nice?
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:iconlegendoffullmetal:
LegendofFullmetal Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
cuz you're a good person? xD
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:iconawesomegirl37:
awesomegirl37 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist
lol if u think that... you dont know me :D
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:iconcertifiedchocoholic:
CertifiedChocoholic Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013
*smiles* Don't you just love Jack Frost? :) I like your writing~ ;)

SINcerely,
CC
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:iconlegendoffullmetal:
LegendofFullmetal Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Who doesn't love Jack? x3
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:iconjehssica13wonderland:
jehssica13wonderland Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Student General Artist
Started the first chapter minutes ago. CAN'T. STOP. READING O.o
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:iconlegendoffullmetal:
LegendofFullmetal Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thats a good thing :D
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:iconjehssica13wonderland:
jehssica13wonderland Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Student General Artist
yes! already on chapter 25. you are making me fangirling soo much!! and this isn't very common of me xD
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:iconmeganfrost89:
MeganFrost89 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013
SQUEAL!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Love him! love him! LOVE YOU FOR MAKING THIS STORY!

:iconiheartitplz:
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:iconlegendoffullmetal:
LegendofFullmetal Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconlawooplz: feelin' the love!
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meekgeek Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'm so glad you put him in this attire! It makes him more mysterious ;3 and the way you described him is so perfect! xD so hot lol!
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:iconlegendoffullmetal:
LegendofFullmetal Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you!
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blaze1893 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
He's light light as snow
I see what you did there lol and jack is hot I mean look at him :iconrotgjackfrostplz: HOT HOT HOT!
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:iconlegendoffullmetal:
LegendofFullmetal Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
mmmmm. yeah. :iconrotgjackplz:
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Maggatha13 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
😍
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FaLyn101 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
"Your eyebrows shoot up out of shock, your heart in a new flurry. He’s extremely attractive"
I just facepalm myself since i was blushing so hard and just imagining this actually happening!
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LegendofFullmetal Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
success xD
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:iconkatnisseverdeen4life:
katnisseverdeen4life Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:love: no other words.
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:iconlegendoffullmetal:
LegendofFullmetal Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
yay for speechlessness xD
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Kurotalia13 Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
... :iconinloveplz:
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:iconlegendoffullmetal:
LegendofFullmetal Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
hahaha
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:iconbooklover4life:
booklover4life Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You shoulda given him the hoodie XD
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:iconlegendoffullmetal:
LegendofFullmetal Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
why?
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:iconbooklover4life:
booklover4life Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I dunno :P it's amazing though
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:iconlegendoffullmetal:
LegendofFullmetal Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks :)
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:iconvannachill09:
vannachill09 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
When's the next chapter coming out? It's amazing!!!!!!!!!!!
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:iconlegendoffullmetal:
LegendofFullmetal Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
hopefully by the end of today~
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:iconvannachill09:
vannachill09 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh I was just wondering!
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:iconlegendoffullmetal:
LegendofFullmetal Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i just finished up finals, so i'm really excited and can't wait to get more chapters out xD
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:iconvannachill09:
vannachill09 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
sounds exciting!!!!!!! I have lost the latest chapters to my one and only story so I don't get that feeling any more. (I don't wanna re-write them because they won't be as good as the originals, and it'll bug me to death.)
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:iconlegendoffullmetal:
LegendofFullmetal Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
awwww :(
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:iconvannachill09:
vannachill09 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yea.... But I'll find it!
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XxSilverStarsxX Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012
I can't wait for more!!!
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rainbowthedragon Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i love this i cant wait till next chap if ther e is
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:iconlegendoffullmetal:
LegendofFullmetal Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
all the way up to ch. 10 now~
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rainbowthedragon Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
yay
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ShiroIri Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing! I can't wait til the next chapter! You're amazing!
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:iconlegendoffullmetal:
LegendofFullmetal Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks :D
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